As we all know that aging is a natural cycle and we all pass through this
phase sooner or later in our life. And no matter how much you love your parents,
somehow your life gets disrupted due to aging and other health related problems.
In my opinion, aging brings negative effects in our life. Undoubtedly, in most cases
as our parents start getting older they tend to suffer from health problems.
Furthermore, parents loss their independence and conceivably become more frail
and needy. Hence, children get to be caregiver for their parents who may pose
several persistent challenges which are as follow.
It is clear that your introduction is turnabout. I see your introduction has good thesis statement. Whats more, you used a lot of good woods, for example "undoubtedly", "furthermore",etc.
ReplyDeleteI am a little confused with the general statement and the thesis statement is the topic about againg being apart in our life or children being the caregiver
ReplyDeletenice introduction ... i think you should focus on the sentence structure more.
ReplyDeletelife. And no matter and after . (?) my doubt
in most cases
as our parents start getting older(,and) they tend to suffer from health problems
better use comma and connection words to seperate
all for all -----------good job..